We used this video as our motivation.
Big Idea: The red is a complex sentences. A complex sentence is a simple sentence with more detail that can't stand on its own. Eg Jett is a handsome boy. It is a complex sentence because is a handsome boy can't stand on it's own.
Feedback: I liked how you showed time passing in your writing.
Feedfoward: Next time you could add more to your description.
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Evaluation: Ireally like how I manged to add a couple of complex sentences to my story because I didn't think I could add some. Next time I could add some more detail to my charters.
Mitch, you have demonstrated a sound understanding of using complex sentences and the one that resonates with me is your final sentence: "Not wanting to lose him Joseph touched the stone, hoping he would survive" and what a way to finish too, with a bang! Your next goal could be to vary your sentence beginnings to hook the reader.
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