Tuesday 18 March 2014

Writing draft 1

W.A.L.T. To entertain


                                                                    Caving
There was a dim glow in the gaping black hole that was waiting to sallow me up. Glow worms swarmed the walls. I knew that If I was too loud they would trun of there light. I dragged my feet across the damp ground. The cave was as black as the night sky.

 I heard a sound up on the roof. What is it? I thought. I looked up


Learnings partner's comment
Feedback I like the way you have done your personification.
Feedfoward next time you need to go into a bit more detail.
Hunter

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